In the effort of
exercise
I shovel
to the back of
the house
Along the path
I find
a drooping tree
surviving
in the snow
In the effort of
relieving pressure
I shovel
off the back of
this tree
Fruitless
my efforts
I used my hands
but it would not
stand upright
It is amazing
how plants
weather
the seasons
for generations
This is my attempt at the Gogyohka form, explained in the previous post.
You’re welcome to try this form yourself.
It IS amazing.
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I’m glad the conditions allowed you to get outside. Your poem is perfect. 🙂 And nature can be, too.
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The conditions have been fine recently. And yes, nature can be perfect.
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Beautiful, Adam! You used the form well. It’s simple, but has a kind of elegant lightness to it.
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Thanks.
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Just pristinely written Adam, love it!
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I sure hope the roses over wintered well. Another cold night tonight here.
Leslie
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I’ve never heard of this form before. So Glad you tried this, it flows so nicely, and makes me think of the resilience of nature 🙂
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Nature surpasses us mere mortals. Haunting poem.
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True dat. …Well, we’re supposed to be a part of nature too.
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Awww, a tree rescue, how sweet.
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It’s still drooping. But it’s a survivor. …Unlike me.
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Well you’re still typing so unless you got smart zombified you’re still alive?
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There are a few smart zombies out there…Dawn of the Dead.
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Have you had your brains today?
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lol. No, I keep losing them…
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That smart zombies always seem to manage somehow
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The play of shadow and light in the photo is beautiful and is perfectly balanced by the poem.
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Thanks. However, the shadows were stronger; the image is gamma-adjusted…
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